Scientists discovered a new element a couple years ago. Imagine the headlines when we produce a new color the first time we kiss.
Imagine the new crayon box of white and red light coating the sky the first time we have sex.
The path over the great mountains is overrun with shrubs and barely visible. The path around the great mountains is well used.
We're going over the mountains.
Die for you? I wouldn't just die for you.
I'd be burned alive for you.
I'd be boiled alive for you.
12 comments:
Brilliant ending! 'I'd be burned alive for you. I'd be boiled alive for you' I love how you didn't use an obvious contrast, burned and boiled aren't usually put together.
thanks so much, chelsey. i had drafted this out with only burned alive ending but added the boiled line in the final edit. i wanted two booms at the end. it also didn't wrap up the alchemy theme but i felt like punching out of the theme a little with the emotion at the end.
This is beautiful. I love the use of color in the intimacy. Nice. :)
thanks so much, torster:)
You're an artist.
So dreamy...what would it be like to go on a first date with Ed? Does Ed arrive with daisies and Rumi quotes? Or maybe Ed is just a regular guy who wants to drink beer, watch sports and get laid. Ed is a very talented enigma, an Artist.
ed wants to have sex on the first date. reading rumi in bed afterward.
beer the next date, only if you're drinking with me. more sex. no sports.
thanks for that, darling:)
Hee Hee Just trying to liven up the Blogathon
mission accomplished:)
Nice! :)
i like this...
This literally took my breath away- the statements at the end...
"...I wouldn't just die for you.
I'd be buried alive for you.
I'd be boiled alive for you."
They caught me off guard- thus taking me by surprise.
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