September 12, 2011

Breach in the Moonlight

No one enters this deep into the forest. No one passes through my perimeter of wolves.

Yet the land speaks of new feet moving across the glen. The birds report news of a stranger in the deep.

I have been cut off for eons. I live in the high branches and the world under the tree. I have clear agreements with the great tribe of wolves. This can mean only one thing.

Love has found me.


Submitted for the Big Bad Wolf Exercise.  


45 comments:

Samantha Sotto said...

Powerful! I did NOT expect that last line.

Kim @ Stuff could... said...

I love the way Love found you! Powerful is a great word to describe it!

Pat Hatt said...

Didn't expect it to go there either, nicely done. So being that deep in the forest does that mean love is part of the bear necessities?..haha

Audrey Allure said...

Beautiful post!

Brian Miller said...

nice...this was like an epicmovie preview...but hey love deserves iteh? smiles.

Mama Zen said...

That last line . . . amazing.

Evelyn said...

you impress the sh*t out of me...

Betsy said...

moonlight can do that to you! :)

Jill said...

and may love never let you go...

She Writes said...

:). Sigh............ That made me happy. Love is hella sneaky like that.

Kelley said...

That was beautiful! I was mesmerized as I read through it.

Yvonne Osborne said...

Nice. Like the wind through the trees, nature speaks. Your words are as musical as all of that. And a great last line to boot!

ed pilolla said...

thanks so much:) i thought the last line was going to become evident to the reader and that's why i made this one short, to get the reader to the kicker as quick as possible:)

Madhulika said...

Nice post..!! Unexpected ending ( you reminded me of O'Henry) ;)

jbchicoine said...

Gosh--your snippets have such a ring of truth, in that hopeful yet tormented way--I hate to think of it as fiction...still trying to figure that out...

Impulsive Addict said...

Awww....love found you! How sweet! =)

oceangirl said...

This is very epic Ed, makes us want to know the beginning, the ending and whatever is in between.

Elisabeth Hirsch said...

Every day your writing amazes all of us in new ways. I love reading your work and the comments that follow ;)

missing moments said...

Very nice and like that ending.

colleen said...

The end surprised me! I didn't know if it was going to conclude violently or sweetly.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Wowzers! Fantastic poem with a killer last line. Loved it!

Sheri said...

Yes! A happy ending. Ah...love.

ladyfi said...

Wonderfully powerful!

shawnacymariekiker said...

the voice in this is fantastic. this ageless, timeless, eons-old presence... and then to find that it was love that had done it. transforming as it does...
the brevity of it was powerful, and the tone, pitch-perfect.

Susannah said...

Oooh, I adore this! What an utterly beautiful piece of writing!

Kenia Cris said...

Awn!!! I'm glad love found you. I may have to move into the deepest parts of the forest as well to see if it happens to me to!

Nicely written.

Take care and keep smiling.

Laurie Kolp said...

Ed- I had to reread this multilayered piece... I love what you have done here.

Paula said...

Your writing brightens my day, so well written.

Creepy Query Girl said...

Ooooh. Good stuff! Love is a sneaky little thing isn't it? Great blog! New follower here:)

wolfsrosebud said...

Wolves... one of my favorite topic.

Kerry O'Connor said...

Well... you got a very genuine smile out of me. What a poem!

Tiaden said...

I love the drama of this, the way you set it all up before the final line.

Lolamouse said...

I love this! I, too, was surprised by the last line and pleasantly so. Guess I've been exposed to too much YA fiction about werewolves and vampires lately! Metaphor? What's that?!!

Wine and Words said...

I hope it's true Shutter Bug! Hey, it's getting too crowded in here for me. Can a few of us just perch in the branches and howl at the moon awhile?

(word verification: poothe. I love that word. I'm keeping it!)

Geraldine said...

Loved where this work ended. You have a gift for engaging the reader Ed. Wonderful words!

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Heaven said...

Unexpected ending.. you left us handing in there ~

Though I must say that the last line is familiar. I think I used it once in my post too.

Thanks always for your kinds words in my blog ~

Ed Pilolla said...

the ending has definitely been used before, but there's no shame in using an eternal truth as a theme anytime.

Su-sieee! Mac said...

Exciting!

Jinksy said...

Love enters and the view expands...

Susie Clevenger said...

Almost has native american undertones...enjoyed your combination of nature and love...

Kay L. Davies said...

Wonderful. The surprise ending is, yes, an eternal truth.
— K

Kay, Alberta, Canada
An Unfittie's Guide to Adventurous Travel

Mary said...

I just loved the ending. It made me smile bigtime!

Robert Lloyd said...

This was a good read and as expressed in some of the comments before me I too did not expect the end. It was a pleasantly shocking twist.

Mystic_Mom said...

LOVE the end. Love the poem. Love it! Love it! (Did I mention that I love this?)...it rocks!

moondustwriter said...

Love the mystery that looms behind the moonlight and the surprise...