October 5, 2011

Slipped Out

When the shadows grow so dark and night appears to have conquered the land, I genuflect and kiss the claw of the dark master. I’m very reliable that way. Put a little pressure on me and I powder like ash.

A little friction lets out so much blood because I celebrate the cuts. I salt them and stew.

You are a peppermint cupcake in my throat, but don’t look for me tonight.

I’m tonguing someone else.

35 comments:

Mandy said...

~~~COOL~~~ ;D

Jill said...

WOW!

Mary said...

Yipes!

Pat Hatt said...

You are really going into creepy land, Halloween getting to you?..haha

Brian Miller said...

def a darker piece...your word choice really drives the feel of this...well done....

Elisabeth Hirsch said...

Wow! I think I could write a whole novel about this one!

Kayla said...

The words are few - but filled with so many mind pictures. I particularly love the line..."put a little pressure on me and I powder like ash". Don't know why exactly....maybe because it is what I am afraid of about myself... Stopping by via Jill...thanks for stopping by my place too!

Stephanie D said...

Nice piece...and I had to look up the word genuflect! :)

oceangirl said...

Wow. Telling, ardent, nearly enticing. Saliva does heal wounds, but please do not be mean to peppermint cupcake.

Ruhi Shah said...

Creepy, but beautiful ..or maybe it's creepy that i find this beautiful..

Little Ms. Fun said...

This piece is dark, powerful, and makes you think. I would call that a success! :)

Classic NYer said...

Whoa... that was deep and kind of creepy... I had to read it a couple of times, actually.

Brittany said...

I had so many different reactions to every line in this one.

Confusing in a most pleasurable way.

Joshua said...

Serving the dark master, it seems. Or is that "dark passenger?" Nicely done.

Claudia said...

a dark piece ed...that's where pressure can take us if we're not careful...tonguing someone else gave me shivers...

Dias Spot said...

nice...great composition...:)

light208 said...

After the day I've had, this all appeared frightenly apt. I shall return when I feel slightly more objective.

Ed Pilolla said...

i'm getting more comfortable unfurling my dark side here. fun!
thanks for the sugar:)

Marion said...

Ooooh, I likey your dark side a LOT! Awesome write, Ed. xo

Daydreamertoo said...

Ohhh very dark and ...sensual too!
A lovely piece.

Wine and Words said...

EFFING AWESOME! More please...

Damn it Ed. You are outwriting yourself!

Wine and Words said...

Oh...and welcome to the dark side. See, it ain't so bad (heh heh)

She Writes said...

Ed, should you really admit all this? :) Haha!

Friko said...

I think I need this explained to me.
I've had a very sheltered upbringing, you know.

Phoenix said...

Love it.

A perfect way to ring in October, my friend. :)

Daydreamertoo said...

Hi Ed, just to let you know I nominated you for this award:
Versatile Bloggers Award

Yvonne Osborne said...

Your words always invoke emotion. You never leave me unmoved. I, too, love the pressure line, and the last killer tonguing one. A surprise. You surprised me again.

My Inner Chick said...

""You are a peppermint cupcake in my throat""

Ohhhh, I love that line, ed. X

Impulsive Addict said...

So who were you tonguing? And are you cutting yourself?

Sorry. I have to be sassy in my comments. It's all I got.

Being Pramoda... said...

Haha.. short and clear ..;)

Madhulika said...

Loved this line..
"You are a peppermint cupcake in my throat"
:) :)

wolfsrosebud said...

strength and weakness all in one

Jyoti Mishra said...

pretty intense n dark...
nice read!!

Betsy said...

oh yes...very dark and intriguing! A peppermint cupcake...lol, now that's interesting!

Lolamouse said...

You really went to some dark places with this one! It touches some places we don't like to visit, which is what makes it so powerful.