Spring, like all the seasons, was so much happier as a season. When Spring was a man, he entered parties and everyone felt better about their decision to attend. Women threw themselves at his feet. Spring created laughter wherever he went and nobody got enough of him. He was everyone’s best friend. Spring built community naturally.
Spring created life.
Summer was super sexy. When Summer was a woman, she showed off lots of skin in all the right ways and the men stared helplessly. Summer created admirers wherever she went. Only the brave approached her, and so Summer only knew men in the prime of life.
And Summer made those men sweat.
Autumn was dark and mysterious. When Autumn was a man, he chased away merriment and commotion wherever he went. When Autumn came around, it was like a ghost town. Those who weren’t scared away got to know Autumn and adored him, especially his darkness and his rich colors as he gave his life energy to his art.
Autumn created masterpieces.
Winter was frigid. When Winter was a woman and felt sunny, everyone became happy and gave thanks because those days were fewer than the overcast days. Not many men could live through her coldness and enjoy her. But for those who could, Winter was truly a breath of fresh air. Winter was unlike anyone else.
This is the third part of The Seasons. Here's the next part.
38 comments:
nice...love the personifications and what each brings out in life...sill like a little mystery though and rich colors...smiles.
Autumn doesn't frighten me. I'm rather partial to him.
then we are all part of the cool circle of people who are friends with autumn:)
Guess I need a sex change. I still want to be Autumn, even though Summer is sexier. Never been much into sexy. It's such a cheap outfit, and such an expensive attitude :)
haha:) i love it.
forget the sex change. you're autumn in the next life:)
i wanted to have two sort of popular people and two who might have fit in more in the underground, so to speak.
autumn created masterpieces. ooh i already know who i am going to like.
you're painting autumn in dark colors...love the mystery and the giving his life energy to art...beautiful personifications ed and the magic of winter in all the coolness...often things become the more precious the less you have them
oh - and i will give you a warning next time..smiles
I really like how 3 of the 4 seasons are female. Sure does seem like there are not enough autumns to go round.
autumn was a man and so was spring. i know, spring as a man, right? but it's either winter and summer as men or women, and spring and autumn as the other, as per the circle. it was fun to toss this back and forth and make these decisions. it's one of the best parts of writing for me:)
---Dear, Ed,
Summer is definitely sexy with her flowing sun dresses, brown skin, & Red Lips.
Yes, I think Summer is completely Female. She's my Favorite.
Love all of your posts. :)
Very interesting and lyrical/poetic! Nice to visit your blog. I love some of the photos/graphics you've been having on your posts. I have the orange flamey thing on my backdrop right now. ;o)
I love this!
thanks, inner chick, carol and mama z:)
I am officially enjoying the hell out of this, and it must continue! :)
gracias, dixon.
and inner chick, i totally see summer as a woman. that's exactly what tips the scales.
So three or four are women, I guess I'm looking in the wrong spot or something, as known can be found by the cat..haha
Great job weaving throughout each season, this right was really pleasing.
haha:) and the three rules of writing are clarity, clarity, clarity. even when you are being unclear, be clearly unclear.
so i have failed in this. alas.
spring and autumn were men. summer and winter were women.
This is lovely and creative. Makes me want to embrace each season for their unique gifts. I can't wait to see what you do next. :)
Hey Ed,
wow - some great writes at the dverse bar tonight - this feels quite masterful and slick as it can come a real stylish piece -taut with not a word wasted.
Autumn was staggeringly perfect but the complete concept and delivery felt flawless
An exemplar
Ed, this is such a good personification of the seasons. A lot of poets go there, but yours is unique. The voice is matter-of-fact, conversational. I felt like the seasons were sitting there, listening. I liked the ending--so many paint winter in terms of "grim."
I've never read a description of the seasons quite like this. I find that personification of the natural world often betrays a lack of respect or understanding of it. Your poem completely avoids this with its charm and humor as well its title, which humbles man (and woman!).
tori, arron, victoria and mark: many thanks:)
Awww that was my bad, read into it unclear, but upon second look it is quite clear. Just look at my mis-spellings in the last comment, I blame working and lurking..haha
Enjoyed, although I have always seen the seasons as women, and even with the maintenance involved, continue to enjoy each of them.
a lovely personification of the seasons - nicely prosed
haha, pat. it is a risk to use the same structure for each seasonal narrative as i did, so slight changes like 'man' or 'woman' is more difficult to pick up. first impressions have meaning. thanks:)
anthony, i see the female in all of them as well, especially a mother figure for spring. but i can also see the male in old man winter:)
thanks, sheila:)
Much awesomeness in these seasons you paint.
And I agree of winter, it is mysteriously beautiful.
Love the creativity in all these seasonal personifications-- here and in the "donkey dung" version as well. :) You literally bring each season to life.
thanks mucho, jannie and joanna:)
It's gorgeous! I coud feel the joy you had in writing these descriptions. Autumn has always been my favourite, and I'm gad he's a man. The genders as you assigned them were clear to me, and I found myself completely accepting your descriptions. Your details are utterly convincing. :)
I really enjoyed the gender and summer personalities. You gave each one a distinct voice in this nature's feast.
I thought though it would have been more powerful (as someone told me as its also my weakness) to make this more active by using the present tense instead of the past.
Overall though, I love it, specially Autumn and Winter's delights.
Nice to meet you at D'Verse ~
rosemary, thanks very much. i did have fun writing this and the others. if i don't have fun, it's pretty much unreadable.
:)
heaven, interesting suggestions. you may be right. i used the past here thinking i might do a conflict-resolution story about the seasons as seasons but unless i do (and i'm leaning against it at this point) switching to present tense might be better. thanks for saying what you feel:)
heaven, i ended up doing a conflict-resolution post right after believing i wouldn't and saying so. it's so funny how elusive the muse can be:)
I love spring! Anyone who creates laughter is the best in my eyes!
And, Ed, I just know there is a 'summer'in me absolutely dying to come out! I might give in and set it free one day soon. :)
Love your work!
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