I lulled the world to sleep. I crawled into bed early for weeks. Then I turned in a little too early and woke up in the dead of night. The world heaved in a dream around me.
I strolled outside past tile artwork speaking my bright future. I heard your birthday laugh high in the oak trees. I descended mountains underground to gold mines of ability.
And suppose none of the splendor of this world could knock me off my path, that I never strayed to find your voice or shower in the veins of gold. Suppose I did this to catch the last ferryboat to nowhere.
Good thing I woke up with you instead.
Understand that's the official story of last night and what I will tell the authorities if they come knocking. But the truth is I had to hurry. I met a messenger and entrusted him with the seeds of the universe, including this youngster:
* * *
It’s no fair I think about you.
It’s no fair I wonder how you are feeling.
It’s no fair that my favorite time is our time.
It’s no fair because this really was supposed to be a summer love.
No fair
I love you like I do.
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58 comments:
Love this poem:)
Ed, I am so happy that summer love turned into something more! You deserve 'something more,' my friend.
nice....funny ow that works out you know...who are we to try and box love...it just happens...love all the imagery man...
Nice how it always seems to spring out when we least expect it, screw the no fair, just go with it..haha
Such a beautiful surprise is love.
fantastic, incredible imagery!
sweetest surprise isn't it?
Yes. I fell in love, or I think maybe I did. I'm not sure because I don't know love. He doesn't love me back, and it is definitely no fair. Will I have a turn before I'm too old?
Probably not because it's no fair. I'm happy you love.
Janie Junebug
Or I just ignored my own efforts to teach people that the poet and the speaker are not necessarily the same, and you are not the "I" in the poem. But somehow, I hope you are.
Love,
Janie
Ed, I love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!
aw, I love this. So nice!
'good thing I woke up with you instead' :)
'no fair I love you like I do.'
yep...those two lines are just wonderful. Sigh.
Aw Eddie you're so smooshy! Good thing. (wink)
Love your love poems, Ed. the world you create is green and leafy with good things.
So glad things are working out, Ed. I always love visiting your blog. The form is very effective in this beautiful piece.
And suppose none of the splendor of this world could knock me off my path, that I never strayed to find your voice or shower in the veins of gold. Suppose I did this to make the last ferryboat to nowhere.
These lines will be the very last ones I read tonight, in the promise of equally lovely dreams.
Thank you, Ed.
ah a love story..we never know when that first glance in the eyes will turn into love. This is such a beautiful piece.
Dreams are wonderful material for poems. This has an intresting twist at the end that makes it unique.
nice!!! entrusting the messenger with the seeds of the universe..the birthday laughing high in the oak trees...love the dream-like state of this ed..the ferryboat...nice...
Very beautiful, the picture, the words, it all :)
Is is no fair but amazing for all that!!
Wow, beautifully expressed! I love it!
could your poem be any more beautiful? no, it couldn't!! it's amazingly wonderful & i hope you did let her to read it! ... have a great week Ed :-)
You weave gold from words, Ed...*sigh*... Perhaps you were an alchemist in a former life? ;o)
You describe so well the nights I have, if I go to bed too early.
The poem at the end is so sweet
Lucky lucky woman you love. *sigh*
Very sweet. Love that picture, too.
Bravo, excellent poem Ed! Now this inquiring mind wants to know... is this about you? I'm so inquisitive, but I hope that this is your story, a wee portion of it anyways.
Cheers! Have an amazing day!
"I heard your birthday laugh high in the oak trees." That's the money line right there. Awesome. Why is it we EVER thought love could be controlled?
Amazing love is. I'm glad you're in and with love. :-)
a great lazy narrative tone only serves to add weight to the superb words and fine piece
cheers ed
I love this poem about love!!
The L-Word can be real scary, but when you find it, embrace it :)
Beautiful poem and beautiful art! Have a great day Ed ;o)
darlin, i remain quite blurry concerning the whole incident. i am in a happy relationship.
:)
I love the line "the world heaved in a dream around me." Beautiful and beauty follows. Wonderful poem.
So beautiful--as is everything you write. This one makes me smile :0)
This is my favorite line, Ed:
"I heard your birthday laugh high in the oak trees."
~Shawna
http://rosemarymint.wordpress.com/2012/01/17/dearth-of-reason/
Love this. No fair, this post made me think of summer, and, having thought of summer, being missing it.
The birthday laughing line is my favorite line too :)
I hope you've been well.
That's beautiful imagery, sunstruck and lovestruck. Wonderful.
Hi Ed, thanks for your comment and for following my blog! Look forward to reading all your posts; your blog is great!
Oh this is too beautiful Ed. I feel like borrowing your words..especially the last line, not fair I love you like I do.
Your poems are not ordinary, they are filled with layers and depths of meaning, feelings and stories. And when it comes to poems, I know that one can only write his or her true feelings.
aah 'love' yeah it just happens
:-) a warm and loving write.
This poem has such a beautiful heartfeltness. It is vulnerable and real and intimate.
A lovely write.
Quite beautiful! And I can totally relate to the poem at the end. I'm living that right now...happily.
Another gem--worded so beautifully. We all "love" the poems about love - a universal feeling. Have a great weekend. Mickie ;)
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Oh gosh Ed, this is wonderful.
I understand very well the meaning of "I shouldn't have fallen in love with you, but I do." It is part of my life in some ways. Somehow it's not as bad as it sounds :D
ed,
your poetry makes one feel deeply.
thank you. X
Can love really last?
You have given hope to all we hopeless cases with these words.
Thank you
Thank you :)
You are a beautiful poet. I am lucky to have found and followed you.
Are we getting mellow and soft Ed as time goes on,lol. And there's nothing wrong with love my friend and your just thinking and saying what a lot of men think, only you have the courage in saying it on your blog. Richard
it's beautiful ed. i love the line "No fair I love you like I do." for some reason, it made me smile.
The structure and the poem itself. This is a keeper. I hope the love is, too. (and thanks for commenting on my blog. I appreciate it.)
I like it Ed--it flows. I just don't do poetry well...
you are one romantic writer.
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